Tuesday, April 15, 2008

The Prettiest Thing - Chapter Twenty-Five

Chapter twenty-five of The Prettiest Thing has just been added on AFF.net so please read, review and let me know what you think. I hope you all like and enjoy it. It is the story's longest chapter yet so there is a lot of detail and insight with the characters. Thank you ahead of time for reading and reviewing.

10 comments:

Anonymous said...

your clearly a very talented writer, no doubt about that. i won't be suprised if i see your work in bookstores in future. I think your style of writing is very unique, you certainly create vivid enough scenes in my mind when im reading it. It's going to be interesting to see how the characters truly develop now - especially ella.
Im also curious as to when you'll be updating your story ghetto gospel. Its a great storyline and i think its one of your best works. Writer to writer id just like to say i know its difficult to update and keep on top of things, develop storylines that are interesting and will capture the imagination, but you do it very well and im glad that your updating more frequently now. So thank you very much for sharing your talent with us, im honestly very humbled x

- freedomwriter88

bklyangel said...

Great chapter. I'm so glad that Brett and Ella finally start something again.

Anonymous said...

You spoil us. This is probably my favourite chapter so far. We got to see Ella and Brett move forward and Joy and Trevor happy. Not only that but the interaction between Lyla and her parents was great. I could feel their relief and love for each other as well as their regret. I also really liked how you allowed us a little insight into Monty. I was reserving judgement, but now I'm starting to think he's a little shady and won't be as good for Ella as I first thought. At least Brett will be there for her no matter what. You are such an amazing writer Kate and I can't wait to see what happens next.
-Steph

Amanda said...

BRILLENT!!!! Kate you are wonderful. I love how you are showing how Monty is feeling and why he is acting the way he is. I know that he is going to be pissed when he finds out that Ella is choosing Brent over him. Now with Brent and Ella, I love how they finally have everything in the open. No regrets with either of them. I figure that Trevor is going to have a hard time with Joy leaving but to see it the way you wrote it you can feel his emotions on such a high level. Great job. I'm glad that Lyla is well and her and Connie and Nick are talking once again. Great job Kate!!

Anonymous said...

YEAH !!! I am so happy for Brett and Ella !!! And now I see that there gonna be a problem with the adoption ...

Anonymous said...

Hey Kate!

I reviewed last night over at AFF but I had to make my way over here and say a big THANK-YOU for such a long, amazing, fast update.

I loved that chapter, particularly the long section of Brett and Ella - I'd really been missing their interactions and I am thrilled that they are going to be a "couple."

It just came to me that Ella hasn't told Brett that she might be graduating early. She just told her family right? I imagine he'll be shocked and then want her to come to Penn State! I hope she considers it, they would be equally great together in college.

Thanks for Trevor's prespective while Joy danced - they are so good for each other and I am keeping my fingers crossed for a happily-ever-after for them too!

Thanks again, it was a wonderful chapter and you should feel very proud of this story!
~HMC

littlewiseone said...

AWESOME! That sums up this chapter quite adequately. Now shall I count the ways in which it was awesome! I’m at work so I will only give you my top 5 ways.

#5 We are getting more insight to Monty and I feel justified in disliking him now. I wanted Brett to just punch him. I know immature but it is what I wanted. (I have a feeling I may get my wish by the end of the story)

#4 Connie and Nick realized they were being jerky and showed love to Lyla.

#3 Lyla is happy again.

#2 Trevor and Joy seem to be falling in love.

And The #1 Reason this chapter was AWESOME

Brett and Ella finally took it to the next step. And the scene at the football field was to die for. “What would you say if I said I Love, love you.” LOVED IT.
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I really liked this chapter if you can’t tell. The showcase was great I could feel Joy’s emotions. I’m happy she did well. I was wondering when Trevor’s hand would come back into the story. I wonder how it is going to affect the story. I love that Brett knows Trevor better than he knows himself and knows that the baby is not going anywhere.

Basically I loved the whole chapter.

Great Work,

Shanna

Anonymous said...

That was absolutely my favourite chapter so far everything was perfect about it!

I'm deliriously happy Brett & Ella finally have started something I just hope Monty doesn't try & mess it up now!? I'm actually disliking him more & more with each chapter but I love every other character! That scene with Brett & Ella was so perfect. I'm so glad she took some control & did what she wanted for once,awww i'm so happy with that development!

Joy & Trevor were so sweet in that chapter too I hope everything works out for them now, though I have a feeling there's going to be some problems along the way with his hand & the baby?! Hopefully not though!

I'm so happy about Lyla & Andy too! It's good to see everyone sorting out there problems!

Basically this chapter was perfect & I can't wait for lots more, update when you can!

L x

Anonymous said...

YES! Brett and Ella are finally getting together. They are so awkward it is cute. (ah...high school) P.S. I love the Trevor and Joy storyline. Teenage pregnancy is a heavy subject to tackle and very controversial. I admire you for including it in your story. Unfortunately, there are always people who want to criticize, but remember that "those who can't do, teach. Those who can't teach, critique." Yeah, ignore them. They suck. You rock.

-angie

Anonymous said...

YEAH !!! I am so happy for Brett and Ella !!! And now I see that there gonna be a problem with the adoption ...
>>that was my review, I forgot to sign ^^"
bulma--veggie