Tuesday, February 19, 2008

The Prettiest Thing - Chapter Eleven

Chapter eleven of The Prettiest Thing is now officially finished and posted on AFF.net so check it out. As I already said, this chapter focuses on Ella, Joy and Lyla, giving some deep insight into all of their characters and I hope that it is enjoyed. I know it may not seem like it when you are reading it but it actually is a very important chapter but it won't be obvious until later in the story. This story makes me smile and I am so excited when I look at my outline and see everything that is to come. I hope everyone is excited as well. Please read and review chapter eleven for me. I didn't have the best day but some kind words from the best readers in the world will certainly help me. I am already in the middle of writing chapter twelve but no promises as to when I will be posting that. I am working on chapter three of Ghetto Gospel at the moment so that will be posted first and then will come a couple more chapters of Ella, Brett and Trevor. Thank you everyone in advance!

11 comments:

Sara said...

O you just made my day! I haven't even read it yet but I'm SO excitied! YAY!

Okay let me go read it then I will come back and tell you how AMAZING I'm sure it is! :)

Sara

Sara said...

Amazing! I loved it - and I'm so glad that Ella has a friend. That girl needs someone besides the boys to talk with!

And again, Layla & Andy just rock because they are so cute! I love that couple!

But only use Monty to make Brett jealous - Ella needs to end up with Brett! Please? :)

Anonymous said...

Yay for Corey! Ella really needed someone besides her overprotective brother and the boy who is causing nothing but confusion lately. I hope to see more interaction with Monty as well. (and not just to make Brett jealous...Ella does not seem like the type for that)

Joy's response is surprising and not so surprising at the same time. Yes I can see her regretting sleeping with Trevor so soon and while she had a boyfriend. But at the same time, did she not see the effort he put in going to her recital, and continuing to call afterwards, etc.? How can she doubt that he really likes her?

It sucks for Andy that Lyla couldn't tell her parents. I look forward to reading more about them.

Looking forward to the next chapter. Hopefully we'll get some insight from the boys.

J

Amanda said...

I didn't have the best day either but you just made my night. It was wonderful. I love how you see the regret of Joy and Lyla, the intense of their emotions but seeing that Ella is doing something different is great to see her grow. You are doing a great job and I cannot wait to read more chapters that you have stored up your sleeve. I can relate to these characters and that you do a brillent job on. Well done.

Anonymous said...

I really liked this chapter!

First off - I am so glad that Ella and Corey are becoming friends!! I think it will be very, very good for her to have someone to talk to and spend time with besides her family. And that Corey is Monty's twin - well, that could be fun also!

I think that Ella is very mature to be consciously "faithful" to Brett even though they aren't dating or anything. Monty might be good for Ella but only in the short term as Brett's sure to come to his senses soon (I'm hoping).

Finally - Joy! I had a bad feeling about them sleeping together so soon and now I am heartbroken for Joy. I think that Trevor really likes her and so, once she lets him talk to her, he'll try and make it better. It's hard when you disapoint yourself like that though and it can take some time to build that back up - I hope Trevor is gentle with her.

I literally can't wait for the next installment!! Have a great day!
~ HMC

Anonymous said...

Awww another brilliant chapter i'm actually in love with this story!

It's really good to see Ella getting to know new people althought I hope a Monty/Ella storyline isn't going to be a long term fixture?! My heart firmly belongs to Brett & Ella instead!

Poor Joy! Hope she talks things through with Trevor soon I really want to see how things develop with the two of them.

Really liked seeing more of Lyla & Andy too, such a sweet couple!


I'm so excited for more. Hope things are going better for you as well!

L x

Anonymous said...

i love your story so far! in fact i love all of your stories. i was just wondering how you find your pics of the people for your story? they always match so great.

Anonymous said...

Aw yeah for Ella! I'm glad she's making a new friend.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

N x

Anonymous said...

Great, fantastic, sweet, wwell-writen story and new chapter ^^
bulma-veggie

Anonymous said...

I like this chapter. I love to see character development, and that is what this chapter was all about. Keep up the good work.

Shanna

Anonymous said...

I really liked this chapter! I really liked getting the insight from the girls! I cant wait for the next chapter,
thanks!