Saturday, September 6, 2008

The Flower Girl - Part VI

I was surprised when inspiration struck me for this one but it did and when I started writing, I could not stop. Chapter six of The Flower Girl is now posted on so please go and read it for me and review. This chapter, the Darkness makes another, more detailed appearance and the next chapter is going to be rather action-packed and will end with some Hawkin/Molly interaction that I know a lot of people have been waiting for. Thank you very much in advance. I love hearing what people think about this very different story of mine.





Anonymous said...

Great chapter! I loved the interaction between Molly and Berith. Johnny Depp as Berith is absolutely perfect. I can totally imagine him playing a character like Berith. I'm really glad that inspiration struck. I'm loving this story.


Anonymous said...

I love it, i love everything mythological, like the manga "angel sanctuary",, and here you prove us you're more than the already talented romance's author
Can't wait for the next chapter ^^

Anonymous said...

Hey Kate,

Wow, you've been busy! These past four days I've been busy with relatives flying in from Texas and California for my brother's wedding. Now that everything is calm and relaxing I have to catch up with "The Prettiest Thing" and "The Flower Girl".

I'm absolutely thrilled that you're continuing "The Prettiest Thing". The promo chapter gives me a good characterization of Ella, Brett, and Trevor. And I like the visualization of the family dynamic in this one. Kyle Colfax is introduce but he isn't even mentioned as Trevor's best friend. Maybe you'll mention that later. For me as a reader Kyle's role seems tricky because he doesn't have a big role so I'm afraid that I might miss something or get confuse again because there three couples with already significant parts. I hope you know what I mean. The new feeling that Ella feels toward Brett doesn't seem that dramatic or exciting as the first version. I will always like the part when Ella and Brett had that eye contact in biology class. Anyways this promo isn't even done yet. In this promo it is more Ella-centric which I like because that's who I want to read about in the first version Brett and Trevor seems to dominant because of their status in their school. Well my opinion doesn't really matter now because you're at chapter 6 already.

Thank you for posting “The Prettiest Thing” again. I'm going to review every chapter and I hope I don't end up sounding like a broken record. Have a good night.


littlewiseone said...

There is something about this story that makes me want to read, even thought this is not the typical type of story I read. You are doing everything right. Thanks for another hit.