Monday, March 2, 2009

When Night is Almost Done - Chap. Five

As planned, chapter five of When Night is Almost Done is now complete and posted on Fictionpress. Whenever you get a chance, please read it for me and let me know what you think of it if you want. Thank you very much.

Amanda

Tess

Connor

5 comments:

Anonymous said...

Yay, thank you!! I kept checking all day to see if you had updated When Night is Almost Done and I was soo happy to see when you did!
I liked this chapter, I have a feeling that Tess and Conner are going to be become important to Beth. And I already hate Amanda, poor Beth having Amanda and an angry ghost on the same day. I can't wait to see more Beth and Sam interaction and also to find out more about Sam's and the houses past, where I believe we might find out more about Beths ghost. Thanks and I cant wait for the next update!
- R

Jae said...

That's a perfect person for Conner. I'm already loving that couple!

Story kind of reminds me of "the Haunting", bad movie, but same principle.

Dolcevita said...

Kirstin Dunst is exactly who I would imagined Amanda be!! Who knew our quiet Sam would be a lil player, but you know what they say, the quiet ones are always the freaky ones. Haha. Anyhow, I can't wait to read more of the story and how Sam and Beth's relationship will play out. Having not read this story for awhile, I got confused when 'Elizabeth' was mentioned, I forgot for a second that Beth was for short. I kept thinking if I forgotten about another character. Haha, anyways great chapter!! I was going to leave a comment in fictionpress but since I was already here, might as well right?!

Rocio said...

I laughed so hard when Conner and Tess entered the room. Great comedic relief for such a tense moment. My heart went out to Beth, she feel invisible- which sucks cuz she's trying to hard.

The comment about Sam expecting her to implicitly trust him reminded me of how some guys actually believe that and I had to smirk when I read it. Awesome job with the pace of the story. Quality is better than just speeding things up. Can't wait to read more.

Naoise said...

LOVED IT!

Poor Beth though. As someone said above, she's trying so hard only to be knocked back to square one.